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To Be With You

Several years ago, I wrote the first two lines of the chorus for my wife and had been stuck there. I finally was able to write a song around those lines. It's one of my few upbeat songs because my lyrics tend to get hokey when I write about happiness, so here is some hokey scheissen. I did borrow a little from Wordsworth in the second verse. An alternate title could be "Ode to My Missus." laugh

This one is all RTs:
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Lyrics:

When the morning sun
Pries open your eyes
You light a smile
And you burst the sky

Has it been this long
We can’t be wrong
We’re right where we belong

Have I ever told you
How good it feels to be with you
If I’ve never told you
I don’t need words to say I love you

In the breath of night
Dancing with the daffodils
Blissful stolen kiss
My heart overfills

Has it been this long
We can’t be wrong
We’re right where we belong

Have I ever told you
How good it feels to be with you
If I’ve never told you
I don’t need words to say I love you

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Nice upbeat song , lovely lyrics and vocals , its got a good driving sound to it !!.

Thanks


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Hi Ezekiel,

This is a good rocker - great beat and well sung.

Congratulations.

Best Regards
Nigel


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Aw, you say hokey but I think it's a really lovely and cute song! Everyone needs a dash of happiness, and I think you succeeded in making an upbeat song that can appeal to many. Thanks for sharing!


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Wow!!!

This is great listening smile

I really enjoyed everything about this... your singing, the band, the mix, the arrangement... everything.

Incorporating some Wordsworth was a stroke of genius! I can sincerely say, that when I've struggled for words, looking at poets has never occurred to me. This is a valuable lesson and I will certainly be keeping it my mind from now on.

You got my applause!

All the best,
Noel


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Scott,

This is really outstanding. Love the groove and your great vocal delivery.

Excellent mix production - loved it!

Bob

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Ezekiel
I MEAN IT WHEN I SAY >>>HOLY MOLY.
TRIPLE WOW !!
this puppy has drive....ABSOLUTELY SUPERB.
fantastic "character vocals".
full of "HOOKS"...yes you understand a great song needs
the hooks.
only thing i might suggest mate is that lead guitar
be down the center of the stereo image ?
and i have no wish to upset you saying that.
i just hear it centered.

FANTASTIC SONG.
MY GOODNESSS ...THAT DRIVING RHYTHM GUITAR IN THE BACKGROUND OF THE MIX !!

lmao..as you can see the song has stoked me up.
brilliant songwriting. you must find a way to get this on major radio stations.
BEST.
om
ps...it would be great to try some chick back up singers
on the choruses...eg "have i ever told you etc..."
just in the background. this is a hit song imho.....
BLOWS ME AWAY !

Last edited by justanoldmuso; 08/07/21 04:19 AM.

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Nicely upbeat and rocking song, worth the incubation, I hope your wife is happy for those romantic words smile Catchy melody and rhythm, very good mix and enjoyed the vocals once again.

Janne


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Most women I know, including Moi, don't mind a little hokeyness from her guy at all long as it's sincere. I wasn't expecting a rocker. Very nicely done.

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Super rocker, outstanding vocal and lyrics!

A great tribute to your wife.

Loved it.


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Scott,
Nice! VERY well written tune. Nice spread of energy throughout, no dips. Three listens, I am convinced.
Vocals and mix are very crisp. Listens well. Thank you for sharing.

Misha.

P.S. I like your alternative title smile

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Very cool rocker. Loved the driving guitar. Super vocal and lyric. Well done


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This is a good Rock song and it is inspiring me to try creating more rock songs. The guitar usage is great too and really shows off the power of BIAB
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Hokey? Not for a 42 year happily married couple like us!

Janice said she was sweetly hooked from the first verse.

"We’re right where we belong" Indeed.

And you delivered that lyric with a nice vocal, mix, and RT/RD choice.

And we most enjoyed the positivity of it all.

J&B


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I didn't read no hokey things in the lyrics...

Ezekiel, it is very interesting to make a rocky lovesong. The lyrics are romantic, sweet and also a bit literary. Mixed with the strong guitar and rest of the 'wild' band gives it a attractive song. Maybe then hokey things slips in ones mind?

You did a very good job on this one!
I enjoyed it,
Hans


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Hi Scott,

This is a really good song. It's kind of like you've melded Buddy Holly and the talking heads together.
Nice lyrics and super vocals. I enjoyed the listen...

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This mix is outstanding! I have on my good head phones. Wow I love this sound. Nice panning of the guitars off to the left and right. Great ending.

So nice for the lady to hear too! Can't go wrong with this one.

Maybe if you have time Scott... a few secrets on how you treat the RT's in your DAW?

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Originally Posted By: beatmaster
Nice upbeat song , lovely lyrics and vocals , its got a good driving sound to it !!.

Thanks


Thanks, Beatmaster!

Originally Posted By: NigelSpiers
Hi Ezekiel,

This is a good rocker - great beat and well sung.

Congratulations.

Best Regards
Nigel


I appreciate the comment, Nigel!

Originally Posted By: Ember - PG Music
Aw, you say hokey but I think it's a really lovely and cute song! Everyone needs a dash of happiness, and I think you succeeded in making an upbeat song that can appeal to many. Thanks for sharing!


Thanks, Ember!

Originally Posted By: Noel96
Wow!!!

This is great listening smile

I really enjoyed everything about this... your singing, the band, the mix, the arrangement... everything.

Incorporating some Wordsworth was a stroke of genius! I can sincerely say, that when I've struggled for words, looking at poets has never occurred to me. This is a valuable lesson and I will certainly be keeping it my mind from now on.

You got my applause!

All the best,
Noel


Thanks, Noel. I am glad I could impart a creative writing lesson.

Originally Posted By: rsdean
Scott,

This is really outstanding. Love the groove and your great vocal delivery.

Excellent mix production - loved it!

Bob


Thanks so much, Bob!

Originally Posted By: justanoldmuso
Ezekiel
I MEAN IT WHEN I SAY >>>HOLY MOLY.
TRIPLE WOW !!
this puppy has drive....ABSOLUTELY SUPERB.
fantastic "character vocals".
full of "HOOKS"...yes you understand a great song needs
the hooks.
only thing i might suggest mate is that lead guitar
be down the center of the stereo image ?
and i have no wish to upset you saying that.
i just hear it centered.

FANTASTIC SONG.
MY GOODNESSS ...THAT DRIVING RHYTHM GUITAR IN THE BACKGROUND OF THE MIX !!

lmao..as you can see the song has stoked me up.
brilliant songwriting. you must find a way to get this on major radio stations.
BEST.
om
ps...it would be great to try some chick back up singers
on the choruses...eg "have i ever told you etc..."
just in the background. this is a hit song imho.....
BLOWS ME AWAY !


Justanoldmanmuso, I take it you like my song. :-) Thanks! Unfortunately, I don't have the modern sound to be on the radio.

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Originally Posted By: jannesan
Nicely upbeat and rocking song, worth the incubation, I hope your wife is happy for those romantic words smile Catchy melody and rhythm, very good mix and enjoyed the vocals once again.

Janne


Thanks, Janne. Yes, she liked it.

Originally Posted By: Sundance
Most women I know, including Moi, don't mind a little hokeyness from her guy at all long as it's sincere. I wasn't expecting a rocker. Very nicely done.

Josie


Josie, Thanks. My wife wasn't expecting a rocker either when I played it for her.

Originally Posted By: MarioD
Super rocker, outstanding vocal and lyrics!

A great tribute to your wife.

Loved it.


Thanks a lot, Mario!

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Very nice!

One of your best I think, Scott, great writing and vocal, also really like your mix and production.

Good from the start to that very cool ending, well done!

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